Chapter 84
Chapter 84
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Fan Ziruos favorability level surged from 45 to 65 with her sudden excitement, and then, following the calming down of her mood, it dropped back to 52.
Young Master He, do you have any suggestions for my novel after reading it?
Fan Ziruo was still sitting as before, speaking as before, except that this time He Yunxiao could already hear a hint of hidden emotion of expectation in her tone.
What advice do you want to give? I suggest you dont write a novel.
He Yunxiao repeatedly considered his words, thinking how he could point out the problems in Fan Ziruos novel without hurting her motivation to write.
I think, this novel of yours, the biggest problem, right . er . is that you . you actually.. ..
You cant actually tell a story.
He Yunxiao wanted to say so, but looking at Fan Ziruos crystalline and beautiful eyes, he couldnt really say such desperate words.
Forget it, Im here to help her with her writing a novel anyway.
He Yunxiao finally said, The biggest problem with your novel is that you actually lack experience.
Fan Ziruo said puzzled, Lack of experience?
Mm. This time it was really about his area of expertise, and He Yunxiao spoke eloquently. In martial arts novels, the protagonist often has to sleep out in the wild, how can a girl portray a scene where the protagonist hunts for fruit without having caught a chicken or killed a rabbit?
Same principle. The girl who doesnt know a bit of martial arts, although she can read martial arts diagrams and imagine the fight scenes, but what is written in this way will often lack fatal details, causing the whole scene to seem unrealistic.
For example, here.
He Yunxiao spread out the manuscript of the book and showed it to Fan Ziruo.
This paragraph of the fight, do you see anything wrong with it?
Fan Ziruo re-read the plot that he had originally written, and upon closer examination, really didnt find anything wrong with it.
Didnt see anything wrong.
He Yunxiao said softly, Ziruo.
Fan Ziruos favorability level changed from 52 to 51
Fan Ziruo didnt like being called on so intimately by outsiders, and she frowned lightly, shifting her eyes from the novel on the table, to He Yunxiao.
However, what she saw was a whistling fist!
This fist was extremely fierce and fast!
Almost instantly, it went from a small ball to a huge object that filled her entire field of vision.
Fan Ziruo froze, and the fist, too, stopped an inch in front of her.
The wind from the whistling fist, which remained forward after it stopped, blew against Fan Ziruos face and gently raised the hair on her back.
Well? Found something wrong with the writing?
He Yunxiao asked with a smile as he withdrew his fist.
Fan Ziruo was momentarily lost for words, pondering thoughtfully for a moment before suddenly coming to a realization.
When a Masters fights, they dont care about how the flowers and plants are!
He Yunxiao pretended to be an old man with a long beard, stroking his non-existent beard as he imitated the old mans voice, The very, indeed true.
Fan Ziruos favorability level changed from 51 to 55
Hahahaha.
The big beauty Fan was amused by He Yunxiaos actions and laughed so hard that she bent her head slightly and had to prop herself up on the table with one hand, her big eyes curved into crescent moons, while her other hand covered the corner of her upturned mouth.
He Yunxiao looked at Fan Ziruos happiness and was happy too. Then he made a sudden realization and said, I think I know why you dont like to smile.
Fan Ziruo was puzzled, Why?
Because you are a good person.
Why dont I smile a lot if I am a good person?
If you smile a lot and others see you, they will know that they are no match for you, and it will increase jealousy and resentment in this world.
Fan Ziruos favorability level changed from 55 to 56
I was praising her when she was low on favorability, but now Im finally on the right track and its starting to go up!
Fan Ziruo weakly smiled, not paying too much attention to He Yunxiao praising her.
She didnt value external things. Instead, she valued inner satisfaction more.
Young Master He, please continue to teach me martial arts.
He Yunxiao was naturally happy to do so, and he said with some emotion, There are many reasons for one to practise martial arts, to strengthen ones body, to join the army, to start a sect. However, this is the first time I have heard of martial arts training for the purpose of writing a novel.
Fan Ziruo said seriously, It was the Young Master who said. Without investigation, there is no right to speak.
Although this was said by He Yunxiao himself, it was rather awkward at the moment, You cant do everything yourself, can you?
Fan Ziruo reached her hands behind her back to pull up her draped hair, ready to learn martial arts.
Why cant you do everything yourself?
He Yunxiao didnt know how to explain to her.
Can you write that the heroine will get pregnant and give birth to one yourself to try out what it feels like?
It seems like also, no?
Fan Ziruo quickly tied her hair and left them coiled honestly on her head.
She stood in the middle of the study, in the pose He Yunxiao had taught her yesterday.
He Yunxiao stood aside and said, Try practising what I taught you yesterday.
Fan Ziruo gave a mmm and then carefully repeated the postures He Yunxiao had taught her yesterday.
Even though Fan Ziruo looked soft and weak on the outside, He Yunxiao unexpectedly found that she could actually recreate the postures she had been taught yesterday quite well.
Specialty: Learning
She was really good at learning!
No wonder she was number one talented girl.
He Yunxiao didnt teach her much yesterday, so Fan Ziruo repeated the poses one by one and finished them in no time.
Young Master He, how is it?
He Yunxiao already knew that Fan Ziruos character was serious and stable, and did not like people who were always joking around.
He gave up the teasing words that were just on his lips and said in a serious manner, Miss Ziruo has done a good job. But there is something I must say to you first.
Go ahead.
In martial arts, apart from hard work, there is also a special emphasis on talent. If Miss Ziruo wants to practise the exciting fights in the novels herself, I am afraid even if you practise for many years, you wont be able to.
These words directly extinguished most of Fan Ziruos interest in learning martial arts.
Do I have to concentrate on learning martial arts, and then write a novel after Ive learned something?
When would that happen?
Seeing her worried look, He Yunxiao said with relief, Actually, you dont really need to become a master, you just need to become a fake master.
Fan Ziruo was extremely clever and immediately understood what He Yunxiao meant.
Young Master He is saying that it is enough for me to learn only the basics?
He Yunxiao said, In terms of writing novels alone, only the basic is indeed enough.
From his pocket, He Yunxiao fished out a book of enlightening palmistry that he had taken from home and handed it to Fan Ziruo.
If you dont believe me, lets do an experiment. You read this palm technique once, then rehearse it once, and then well try it in hand-to-hand combat.
Fan Ziruo was not familiar with martial arts as always, so when she saw He Yunxiao say this, she had no choice but to do as he said.
She was not Du Yinyun.
Although Du Yinyun did not learn martial arts, she had been taught many martial arts moves since she was a child, and was no stranger to them. The Fan family, on the other hand, did not advocate martial arts and even deliberately avoided them. This left Fan Ziruo with little natural knowledge of martial arts.
Even under these circumstances, she read through He Yunxiaos Enlightening Palm Technique, and when she tried to do it herself, she could actually recreate it to a certain extent.
When He Yunxiao saw that she had almost learned it, he said, Miss Ziruo, come and try your hand with me. You dont have to worry, just use what youve just learnt and hit me freely.
Fan Ziruo nodded, so she learned the moves from the book and swung her palm at He Yunxiao.
In He Yunxiaos eyes, Fan Ziruos stance was really light, and slow.
However, he deliberately slowed down his speed to accompany Fan Ziruo to experience martial arts, so it seemed that the two of them were fighting on an equal footing.
Fan Ziruo waved her hand and shot a palm straight at He Yunxiao, who also did not want to give way, and used the same stance to shoot at Fan Ziruo.
Of course, the force clashed.
Thus, the classic scene in martial arts novels, in which two supreme masters clash palms, appeared in the study of the Fan Mansion.
After a while, Fan Ziruo suddenly realized that something was wrong.
A man and a woman, palms against palms .
What is this? Are you holding hands with He Yunxiao?